Who/where
A group of friends are sitting in the front row of creative writing summer camp.
They are enjoying their popcorn and drinks. They are all different country people,
They’re watching a scary movie in 3D.everybody scream in summer camp room.
My ear was so hurt. Someone’s drink’s drop on my runner .after he drop his drink’s my
Runner going to be sticky. It’s feeling really bad!!!!
What?!
The group friends going fall down except me and Jenny. I don’t know why there fall
Down I drink there potable water, its taste like beer. I think somebody change the beer
Bottle and potable water. Mystery going labyrinth…but I’m really scary. Because this
Happen like this 3D movie, what’s happening know????
Problem
This happen is really similar to this movie…story like who name Jaxxon and George
They are best friend but one day they do fight. Next day Jaxxon was dide, why??
Because George change her bottle to poisonous water. This is movie story.
Jenny and I were very many phobias. And we are not best friend. And we have always
Problem….oh my! Jenny was gone, where is she???
Climax
I found Jenny in college washroom. She wants to go to washroom quickly.
We called police, they searching our classroom and found something in desk.
That desk is Jenny’s desk. Oh! Poor Jenny you’re a criminal? Are you? Jenny didn’t say
Anything… ’I’m so disappointed you”. You’re so bad! I want to friend with you but me
Don’t Want to friend with criminal, sorry. Jenny was crying I think her sorry for me and some other friend……
Happily ever after
Today she goes to prison. Some classmates are crying. I’m sad too. But she wants to kill
Me and my classmates. Next week Friday I go to school. I change the school today.
I don’t want to go to school anymore I change school so many. I have very many
Friends but I just meet them 2weeks or 3 weeks. I really want true friends.
I miss you Jenny, I always wait for you…
Jessica Sohn
Jul 06, 2011 @ 22:12:46
Okay…Ummm
I liked it when you used funny sentences like
‘somebody dropped their drink in my runner. Gross!’
Jeffrey76515
Jul 06, 2011 @ 22:13:24
Pretty sweet.
Jessica Sohn
Jul 06, 2011 @ 22:15:36
and I also liked it when your story was mysterious
and it would be great if you used some scary words like
‘tick tock tick tock…”
creativesummercampdoug
Jul 06, 2011 @ 22:21:35
weird but funny=o
Nicole C
Jul 06, 2011 @ 22:24:50
I like how this is funny. It’s also really creative. Maybe next time you could edit it a little more. Nice job! =)
creativesummercampdoug
Jul 06, 2011 @ 22:27:22
I think the story is great.And the main characters’ feelings are great too.If the writer write more about the other characters’ feeling,it would be better.
creativesummercampdoug
Jul 06, 2011 @ 22:27:46
I think your story is very interesting and the title of the story is creative.
Moira
Jul 06, 2011 @ 22:42:21
Great use of subtitles! The story made me think about my kid, who is at camp, too. Keep up the good work.